Power Girl’s Power Date Rewrite

Power Girl’s Power Date was a long project (roughly 40 pages in Word) that I’d finished about a week ago when I first set up this blog.  The story wasn’t bad, but I was in too big a hurry to get it posted after going almost two years without writing anything.

After some quality feedback, I did a modest re-working of the story.  I made Power Girl a bit less neurotic, cut out a bit of redundant dialog here and there, and added a couple new parts that better address Marc knowing Kara’s secret identity, and him asking her for advice on an important project to show he was more than talk about admiring her intellect.  Said project may become an important part of a future story also.

The one thing I didn’t take serious steps to address was Marc appearing too perfect.  It’s a romance story set in a world where there’s a guy that can push planets around, is one of the smartest beings on the planet, works selflessly to help others and finds it near impossible to lie.  Sooooo… Marc isn’t too unrealistic compared to Superman.  Besides, every girl deserves to find an amazing guy.

The new story is probably 85% the same, so I’ll leave it to the reader to decide if they think it’s worth another run through.  I personally think the new version is a much better read however:

Power Girl’s Power Date Ver2.0

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